Make references and paragraph links unambiguous
Pronomen und Verknüpfungen eindeutig machen
Resolve unclear pronouns and choose connectors that preserve temporal, causal and contrasting relationships.
Readers must know what words such as sie, dadurch and dabei refer to. Repeating a key noun is better than a short but ambiguous pronoun. If a report mentions a workshop and a presentation, Diese findet später statt can be unclear because both nouns are feminine. Name Die Präsentation when that is intended. Dadurch asserts a causal relationship; danach only orders events. A room change happened before a fall in attendance, but chronology alone does not establish the cause. Im Gegensatz dazu compares contrasting states, whereas außerdem adds information. Revision should clarify the reference and logical relation without silently adding a stronger causal claim.
Die Präsentation findet nun am Sonntag statt.
The presentation will now take place on Sunday.
Der Schreibworkshop bleibt am Samstag.
The writing workshop remains on Saturday.
Mit dieser Änderung ist nur der Präsentationstermin gemeint.
This change refers only to the presentation date.
Danach ging die Zahl der Anmeldungen zurück.
After that, the number of registrations fell.
Ob der Raumwechsel die Ursache war, ist noch offen.
Whether the room change was the cause is still unresolved.
Zur Klärung sollten wir die Rückmeldungen genauer prüfen.
To clarify this, we should examine the feedback more closely.
Readers must know what words such as sie, dadurch and dabei refer to. Repeating a key noun is better than a short but ambiguous pronoun. If a report mentions a workshop and a presentation, Diese findet später statt can be unclear because both nouns are feminine. Name Die Präsentation when that is intended. Dadurch asserts a causal relationship; danach only orders events. A room change happened before a fall in attendance, but chronology alone does not establish the cause. Im Gegensatz dazu compares contrasting states, whereas außerdem adds information. Revision should clarify the reference and logical relation without silently adding a stronger causal claim.
Resolve unclear pronouns and choose connectors that preserve temporal, causal and contrasting relationships.
Do not assume the nearest noun is always the intended referent, or replace a temporal link with a causal one merely to make the text sound smoother.
Give each pronoun a clear referent. Danach expresses sequence; dadurch expresses causation and needs supporting evidence.
Revise this fictional report into a clear 180–220-word German message: the writing workshop and presentation were both planned for Saturday; the presentation moves to Sunday, the workshop stays Saturday; the workshop room changed from West to East; afterwards registrations fell from 30 to 24, but the reason is unknown. Clarify referents, chronology and the open cause, then request useful follow-up information.