Give each paragraph a clear argumentative job
Einen argumentativen Text sinnvoll gliedern
Organise a position, supporting reason, limitation and qualified conclusion instead of merely accumulating connectors.
A coherent argument needs relationships, not just long sentences. A proposed quiet hour in a library can first be introduced as a limited trial, then supported by a relevant observation, qualified by an objection and concluded with an evaluation plan. Put the evidence beside the claim it supports. Zwar … aber concedes a point before a contrast; folglich announces a conclusion that must actually follow. An observation that eight of twelve respondents want quiet does not prove that every visitor supports the plan. A useful final paragraph therefore recommends a trial and evaluation, not a permanent policy already justified for everyone. Each paragraph should advance the argument rather than repeat the introduction.
Zunächst möchte ich den Vorschlag kurz eingrenzen.
First I would like to define the proposal briefly.
Ein Argument dafür ist der Wunsch nach einer ruhigen Arbeitsphase.
One argument in favour is the wish for a quiet period of work.
Acht von zwölf Antwortenden unterstützen die Idee.
Eight of twelve respondents support the idea.
Zwar ist dieser Wunsch nachvollziehbar, aber die Rückmeldungen erfassen nicht alle Besucher.
Although this wish is understandable, the responses do not cover all visitors.
Außerdem muss die Gesprächsgruppe berücksichtigt werden.
The discussion group must also be taken into account.
Deshalb schlage ich einen befristeten, anschließend ausgewerteten Versuch vor.
I therefore propose a time-limited trial followed by an evaluation.
A coherent argument needs relationships, not just long sentences. A proposed quiet hour in a library can first be introduced as a limited trial, then supported by a relevant observation, qualified by an objection and concluded with an evaluation plan. Put the evidence beside the claim it supports. Zwar … aber concedes a point before a contrast; folglich announces a conclusion that must actually follow. An observation that eight of twelve respondents want quiet does not prove that every visitor supports the plan. A useful final paragraph therefore recommends a trial and evaluation, not a permanent policy already justified for everyone. Each paragraph should advance the argument rather than repeat the introduction.
Organise a position, supporting reason, limitation and qualified conclusion instead of merely accumulating connectors.
Do not attach folglich to a conclusion that is stronger than the evidence, or confuse acknowledging an objection with abandoning the entire proposal.
Position → relevant reason and evidence → limitation or objection → proportionate conclusion. Connectors express an existing relation; they cannot supply missing evidence.
Write a 180–220-word German recommendation: a library is considering one quiet hour on Tuesday for four weeks; eight of twelve questionnaire respondents favour it, but total visitor opinion is unknown; a reading group needs conversation space; a separate room has not yet been confirmed. Recommend a conditional trial and explain how to evaluate it. Give each paragraph a distinct job.